On Wednesday, the 10th of March on an Easter holiday, my parents decided we would have to move because there was a drought here in Saudi Arabia. So we had to travel to Castries, the capital of ST Lucia, I brought extra water,in case of any more droughts, I thought that Castries ought to be great!!! But when we reached Castries, there was an allowing tornado at work!!! I ran and ran until I was whipped up into that thing, there were other visitors inside, and I'm telling you no one reported that tornado as their favorite. Mom and Dad were so scared, they ran to safety, but they weren't as foolish as me to run towards the tornado, and they were safe. When the tornado was over I had to be sent to hospital for, I had mud and dust inside my lungs!
Very exciting story Abby, you worked hard to include lots of great words. Please can you edit your story and check your use of commas and fullstops.
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Mrs Wilcox
just done it hope its all correct if I did not get it correct again then that means I don't get full stops and commas then can that be one of my targets?
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from Abby
Much better Abby, I will go over a a couple of other points with you tomorrow. Well done for editing! :-) Good job!
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