"I wish we could stay, in our old house mom," moaned Ryan as he and his mum and all the other passengers, were changing accommodation. He and his mother and all of his family and friends were moving house, in New York.
"Our house, was really great", cried Ryan again he had red hair, with a rubbish t-shirt that was grey and, not been washed, for a whole month! Ryan had, torn trousers that were blue with green, disgusting goo all over, them Ryan was really annoyed and aggressive about his mum. Once mom had said the word "lets go away from here", he cried mum, and also he had to have a bitter, dinner that night. And Ryans mum had shouted this...
" you'll do what I say now, go and get packed!", poor Ryan, a brilliant day was spoiled by his, mother but, he did exactly what, she said. Ryan started to cry and this is what he said
"I could go and do a collection of strong bullets and hard, grey guns, to kill mum!", he tried to get through his problem successfully, by talking, like he was on the TV channel
"Our house, was really great", cried Ryan again he had red hair, with a rubbish t-shirt that was grey and, not been washed, for a whole month! Ryan had, torn trousers that were blue with green, disgusting goo all over, them Ryan was really annoyed and aggressive about his mum. Once mom had said the word "lets go away from here", he cried mum, and also he had to have a bitter, dinner that night. And Ryans mum had shouted this...
" you'll do what I say now, go and get packed!", poor Ryan, a brilliant day was spoiled by his, mother but, he did exactly what, she said. Ryan started to cry and this is what he said
"I could go and do a collection of strong bullets and hard, grey guns, to kill mum!", he tried to get through his problem successfully, by talking, like he was on the TV channel
" what if we don't like our new home", moaned Ryan.
"Will you, stop moaning Ryan!", Shouted mum "I really wonder if we will like or dislike the new home too!", the next day they went to the new home and Ryan called his room the, France!...
And did they like or dislike the, new home? Well they loved it!!!
By Abby
"Will you, stop moaning Ryan!", Shouted mum "I really wonder if we will like or dislike the new home too!", the next day they went to the new home and Ryan called his room the, France!...
And did they like or dislike the, new home? Well they loved it!!!
By Abby
Good use of speech marks, and descriptive vocabulary. Well done!
ReplyDeleteLet's leave the guns out of stories next time though Abby, they are not very friendly are they? :-)